Proud Of Me Comments

As with the other poem of yours I commented on, your rhyming is legit, but I'm still not feeling your flow(as in Naughty By Nature's Feel Me Flow, good song) . Listen to some of your favorite songs or read some of your favorite poems, and above all else, you'll realize how well the words flow out of your mouth as you say them. I'd suggest making a more conscious effort at the flow of your poems, the better the words flow, the more easily the rhyming will come. Keep it up Mr. Kaiser

Absolutely stunning, made me think about my two boys.