Princeton Comments

Very somber poem Jake.....Sad thing to go visit a grave when it is someone you love. Nicely written.

I think the narrative style you chose works well with this kind of material rather than gussying it all up with alliterations and wordplay. Well done. Serious subject leavened by telling it through the eyes of a kid.

is that you jacob the same jacob i used to know a great job on a difficult subject you have hit the bulls-eye i thought it was herbert writing you have grasped a similar style, that flows on and reaches a climax at just the right moment Warm regards allan

wow...sweet....if you can be sweet...it gives me a new goal to strive for....

This is so sad Jake. You have really put me there at the graveyard with him. Such a touching poem. I'm am truly impressed. Sincerely, Mary