You may prefer to write in a precise style eg 8 syllables then 6 then 8 then 6. While this style isn't easy, we can get more if we keep reading the written lines to confirm they fit or not. I've tried this style for years and found it most helpful. I use it for my Christian poetry and my Stephen Gayford wildlife poetry.
Your poetry doesn't flow smoothly, but it does contain a lot of pure thoughts that keep the Christian reader interested. When we use the Name Of Jesus as in Jesus's robe or Jesus' robe or Jesu's robe, the poetry isn't always helpful as if we were to use Christ's robe or the Lord's robe or even the Rabbi's robe.
So when the syllables don't fit using certain names or words we may have to rethink the phrasing. Apart from a few phrases, I noticed a few errors like it is shortened to its instead of it's. Sometimes a comma when it wasn't meant to be there. But all things considered, there's a lot going for this poetry. Sincerity of purpose, faith in the future, becoming a follower of the Way.
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You may prefer to write in a precise style eg 8 syllables then 6 then 8 then 6. While this style isn't easy, we can get more if we keep reading the written lines to confirm they fit or not. I've tried this style for years and found it most helpful. I use it for my Christian poetry and my Stephen Gayford wildlife poetry. Your poetry doesn't flow smoothly, but it does contain a lot of pure thoughts that keep the Christian reader interested. When we use the Name Of Jesus as in Jesus's robe or Jesus' robe or Jesu's robe, the poetry isn't always helpful as if we were to use Christ's robe or the Lord's robe or even the Rabbi's robe. So when the syllables don't fit using certain names or words we may have to rethink the phrasing. Apart from a few phrases, I noticed a few errors like it is shortened to its instead of it's. Sometimes a comma when it wasn't meant to be there. But all things considered, there's a lot going for this poetry. Sincerity of purpose, faith in the future, becoming a follower of the Way.