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I creep forward
on silent paws
silly little creature
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Remarkable tonal shift...a lighthearted start and a dark finale. This gem goes to myfavourites.
I wanted to make the reader uneasy and then spooked---it seems I succeeded with you, M.J. which makes my day, my friend!
Your absolutely suspenseful poem stars off on a humorous note making me smile. And then switches to Predator... making me sit on the edge of my seat. I almost fell off by the time I reached the end. Thoroughly entertaining! Loved every line! at
Thank you for telling me your reactions to this poem---twas exactly what I intended and it feels good to hear it accomplished my aim! ! so glad you loved it!
Part 2.. So picturesque to the minutest detail, I felt a dread gripping my soul as I read through
I tried hard to give the readers a very uncomfortable-looking-over-the-shoulder read! ! ! I do hope the dread faded away, my dear friend--I would not want to harm your day in any way
Wow! ! Susanaic! ! ! That's cool! ! ! Kind of like Titanic.... er... manic.... er... Well maybe Susanaic is in a different realm! ! ! Love you, my friend!
This is an absolute gem.....really brilliant....thank u, dear poetess.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Anjandev---would you understand if I hope it gave you the shivers? ? ! !
Two shades of life so beautifully crafted in a poem. Loved reading it.🌹
what lovely encouragement, Aarzoo--I am glad you enjoyed the ride!
Very spooky! .. An excellent Halloween poem! .. Ever so creative and Brilliant! .. Definite 5 Stars! ...+++++
Rebecca! ! ! Hope it gave you a few shivers [in an artistic sense of course! ! ! ] thank you for giving it stars!
The depiction of the predator and prey are so vivid. I feel like I am watching a movie, giving me that heightened feelings of suspense and fear. To my Poem List.
that reaction was music to my ears, my dear friend! I tried to live in both the prey and the predator--thank you for faving this! ! !
A magnificent poem so well crafted. It expresses in brilliant detail the evilness and darkness of the mind and thoughts of the Predator and the utter innocence of the prey.
The feelings of both --the prey and the the predator, so powerfully expressed.It seems as if you can read mind.
I tried to put myself in both roles and feel the personality of both--I wanted to stimulate shivers of fear and distaste for the predator and a sense of fellowship with the prey--thank you for reading this, my dear Bharati
I creep forward on silent paws silly little creature you are being watched and you don't know it don't sense it but I I see everything I know
The human and poetic attitude towards all the victims gives high value to this poem and the weak creature here is nothing but a symbol of every weak victim in the unjust world, I do not know how to thank Susan for her beautiful and enriching poems 5/5
My dear Soran--I am so relieved that you enjoyed the journey through this dark world of predator and prey-- it is a tragedy that this predator also attacks victims on a social level as well
what is in the dark I know what's melting from shadow to shadow I know what's coming through the night and what's around the corner waiting
Thank you for feeling a few shivers as you read this, my dear friend Soran
Absolutely a wonderful poem... thrilling expression...liked it.5 stars
Dr. Dillip---I am so glad the threatening darkness of this poem didn't turn you away--I really tried hard to be the most terrifying predator of them all! Thank you for 5 starring it! !
This is absolutely superb.........thank u, dear poetess.......
thank you for dropping by and reading, Anjandev