Sunday, August 14, 2005

Poor Little Boy Comments

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Poor little fool crumpled and worn
From this life all you loved from your arms were torn
Sadness and sorrow the rest of your life
This is what follows you now day and night
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nikki hays
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Matthew Pearson 14 August 2005

Ditch the bumbling rhyme. The cliches. Ignore four line verses and write unequal lengths. Search to really drive home your emotions by coming up with an interesting metaphor or two. You'll be on track.

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