Saturday, April 11, 2009

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Tattered had been my love!
With a shattered heart that has mended.
When I thought it unbearable...
To witnessed the lips I kissed,
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Lawrence S. Pertillar
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Sarah Everson 11 April 2009

Aside from two major mistakes in language this is extremely good! SHExx

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Sandra Martyres 11 April 2009

Very strong words...demonstrating the anger and hurt that you felt Lawrence at being let down and cheated by someone you loved....

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Lawrence S. Pertillar

Lawrence S. Pertillar

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