Poetry Class Poem Comments

good good. It contains good form with a posture to present itself. I liked it bu tas before you can work on the ending unless that is not the ending? but It was good on the hand. Inkweaver

The first six lines are very interesting and very well put. The ending could use a little work but other than keep up the work. Can't wait till it is all the way done!

I don't know enough about poetry to be of any help...but I did enjoy reading it with it's vivid similes....you must be a morning person..... jk.....thanks Vallerie

This poem is for my class, so please give me feedback. I'm not quite done yet, so help me out with what you think!