Friday, December 23, 2005

Pocahontas Comments

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If you want to build a mega-mansion,
try to spoil an area that’s exclusive,
it’s most American to flout expansion:
don’t hesitate because you are abusive
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Hugh Cobb 23 December 2005

Do I detect just a note of irony? ? ? Nice work, Gershon. I had to read it a couple of times to be sure. The writing as usual is clean and clear. However, you might find a comma useful right after 'Behind each tree we fell...' It might make the ending clearer for we grammar slaves. Mazeltov! Hugh

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***** ********* 23 December 2005

I read this twice to make it sink into my sodden brain tonight Gershon! shopping is over, thank the lord. Great take on The greenpeace struggle. We have an Indian Queen, near me. 10 from Tai wishing you a very merry chrimbo, and all the surprises you could wish for yourself.

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Jeremiah Shine 23 December 2005

LOL...The pilgrims mostly died...famine and pestilence. Then the Indians got wise and started in on 'em.

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