Pleasure Was No Sympathy Comments

This is one of your more successful poetic efforts. It is well phrased in most parts with a good rhythm and gradually builds to a climax. Also your use of rhymes is creative in some parts and provokes a definite sensation relying heavily on a drawn out sound.

my golly gosh.........

From the first few lines you could just feel the blood rising, descriptive and desperate, while this type of poem has been done before it is, without a doubt a style that never ceases to enthrall and enchant it's readers