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if i was a painter i could paint this scene because u discribe it so well.

There is nothing harder than seeing the one you love with someone else and you really said it well here.

I felt it, you took me there... Good poem... Colin J...

Cordell This I like least of the three.For me it gushes and I'm drowning in it.I swim away. Why are the others better, maybe should be tighter and more poetic or imaginative phrasing. maybe it says too much Thanks for your comments. send you a message shortly Martin