Ph: Love: A Trembling Rose Comments
Such a trembling rose! She has something to hide,
Feigns her cough hoping Prince will remain by her side,
Though she loves him, in fact, she is loath to declare,
Her connection to one with two feet, could he care?
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a real rose, as in 'bush'? i've heard of rose hips, but not feet. boy = Prince? but he takes his leave yet i think you use but like instead, and yet could replace but, BUT THEN you'd lose your rhyme (regret/yet) . nice work. i've heard of traveling by Greyhound (bus) , but not 'by' a flock of birds! REPROVE: verb reprimand or censure (someone) . (cont.)
Hiding a rare treasure under a heap of extended metaphors, is something I have observed about Brian. ha! A beautiful poem inspired by an intriguing story. Love is indeed the essence of life! One day, perhaps we shall all meet and dine with the Little Prince!
Hi, Brian, I enjoyed this. The line Mere distance has nothing to do with desire is particularly well-crafted. I haven't read the book but will check it out now.
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8/17/2025 4:56:11 AM # 1.0.0
(cont.) stanza 5 not very clear for me. it sounds like the boy-Prince can't stay put. thanks for Poet's Notes, though it IS inadequate! bri :) i've especially enjoyed reading Robinson Crusoe (3 times) over my lifetime. maybe i will once again?
For those of you familiar with the poetic musings of Bri Edwards and myself, it is clear that as in the TV show 'Greatest American Hero' where he loses the instruction book for the 'Super Suit' left for him by 'Aliens, ' when both Bri and I were born, our parents (not us) forgot to take the instruction book home from the hospital! Mea culpa!