Ph: Life: Kiddie Porn Comments

p.s. to MyPoemList, ....for kicks, if nothing else. bri :)

(cont.) Stanza 2 is my favorite & would fill out its own poem is expanded. You've given life to a good poem. you made good rhymes; not sure about music (i did not notice any; i was too busy looking for Kiddie. bri :)

(cont.) In stanza 3 only one apostrophe is not needed. the possessive its takes NO apostrophe; its (oops!) ...it's a common enough error. ha ha. you got it right/correct the 2nd time. ;) i say stanza 4 is trying to cover too much territory, and maybe you shouldn't try to be cute/clever! as for sperm/egg: i like BOTH with toast for breadfast. Last stanza would be understood by more if they knew more about you; a Poet's Notes perhaps is in order. (cont.)

Or an act of amoral libido run wild Being a high-class poet, i prefer concupiscence instead of libido. don't YOU! ? CAn LIBIDO be amorAL? ? ? after more definition checking, i say libido IS amoral, but NOT immoral! ! But an act prompted by libido may be immoral, though not necessarily. With a consequence, 'parent, ' you're hoping to fudge? i 'love' the use of fudge here (not candy fudge) . there's a misplaced apostrophe; blame PH. (cont.)