Perhaps The God That We'Ve Created Is A False God. Comments

Thank you, William, a needed smack in the face for a vermiform theology that insists we grovel in the dust unworthily all our lives. I wish more church leaders thought as you do: spending much time working with folk who are told repeatedly they're useless & evil, I know the value of being told you're 'forgiven, loved & free'.

This is one of your best poems because it has gone way off the deep end and taken risk and has survived. Also, it has a very provincial feel to its conversational tone which works in your favor.

this poem has a good concept but it needs reworking to make the points clearer.

WOW! So well conceived. This is very well written, William! Congratulations! L