Friday, June 26, 2015

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People laugh and talk
People crawl or walk
People say hello or goodbye
People say the truth or they tell a lie
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Melissa Patty
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Jak Black 14 July 2015

I like the sentiment in this poem. Do unto others as you would like they do unto you. The rhyming is good, Melissa but you lose the rhythm, Too many syllables in some of the lines. An extremely good effort, especially for a fourteen year old.

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Melissa Patty 14 July 2015

No problem, thank you for spotting this, I will try to improve on this Thankyou very much x

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