Sunday, September 23, 2007

'Penny' Comments

Rating: 5.0

When our eyes first met, I knew you were mine
The moment I held you, I had crossed the line
The feeling I felt, with our first embrace
I’ll never forget, the look on your face
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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 23 September 2007

Very nicely done, P-9901...lots of heartwarm detail...and vivid imagery... Amorous Poetry is not as easy as many think...as it is easy to jot down some smooth words of love, but if the words don't create a well constructed nexus of verses...it won't come-off as this poem does... FjcR

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