Penance Comments

And that is his Penance! Yes, I truely get this one! Another great write Tiffany! Now, when I have the time, on another day... I shall pickup where I left off- I look forward to your word play! Great Job on this one! ! Great Ink! ! ! ; -) -Kelly.

I like the story like structure of the story like structure of the poem.

o.o very well done i love the different pov, its a well put together poem, long, but incredibly detailed and moving favoriting ;)

I like how you give another point of view on the fall of Lucifer.

Now this is what I call going deep into a poem keep it up :)

Your poetry is epic. I would suggest improving on the language you use to tell your epic story. If the language isn't more beautiful, with clever phrasing, descriptions that really pop! (jump out at the reader) . You tell a great story but it may fall outside what is considered poetry. See if you can improve on your metering (the words of the poem has a rhythum) and work on coming up with more beautiful phrasing to tell your stories. You are a great story teller.

I just love the simplicity with which u portray grave subjects, and also for the fact that u're not monotonous. This reminds me of milton's paradise lost.

Terrific poem. Grunter loved it too. Kinda scary though.

You lean towards the epic, but this one reminds me of Clipped winged wonders. It's shorter, and less impressive, but it captures a variance of the same spirit