Paying Comments

always brilliantly written. your words very insightful and profound.

Besides the structure and flow which is always excellent in your poems, I felt this poem has great depth and wisdom.

Hi Greenwolfe 1962, I have enjoyed reading this poem.I think your form and structure are excellent.Also, there is present in your work that innate rhythm which is a characteristic of good writing. Enoch John

Hello Again... I know you said you don't care for my short poems but here's one any way regarding your poem 'Paying'... Double Occupancy Her house My heart From neither can he depart and We collapse Under the strain... Try to rebuild But fall again From the weight of the pain! Dorothy

A very good poem.We want to escape many times in our life but this is not easy.You have described it psychologically.Good job.

We all pay in one form or another...yours strikes a universal chord that any of us can relate to...well done...Coach

Definetly worthy of the hall of fame! x

Inspired writing! This is worthy of the hall of fame. Cheers Anita

Sometimes we simply go through the motions in order to keep the peace, but inside we are suffering. Even though it's kept beneath the surface, still in your heart you are somewhere else. It's difficult to be two people - one on the outside and another on the inside. I know - I've been there before, and it's painful. This is deep and introspective soul-searching. Well presented. Linda :)

Greenewolfe, This has a different feel than your other work. It feels as if you're stretching (not that you need to stretch) . In any event, I really enjoyed this.

This is very clever - to personalize the mind as some 'other' that is responsible for the sin of omission you confess, while revealing an abiding passion for someone outside the marriage vows. Your use of a traditional form works very well to keep a light touch and the last stanza works a treat. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Smooth, tight, and mellifluous in structuring...like the language employed.... A lighthearted theme, but one that offers much truth, and wisdom. Stellar crafting. ~ FjR ~ ..2008..

A great read Greeney! Love this poem and fitting title! ! *10*! ! Best regards, Friend Thad

The title is so well suited to the story this poem discloses. We do find ourselves 'Paying' one way and another for each of those choices made in life.

Lovely flowing poem, a great depiction of deceit and the resultant problems that arise through it. Wonderfully written. Andrew

♥ enjoyable read. wishing you luck. ♥ Sending hugs your way, Coreena

Enslavement to our morals and emotions can be so devastating on our energy.

This lilted back and forth as a game of tennis might in you don't pay serious attention.... more like the act of a patient than the practise of patience....

What do you want to do? ? It's an awful feeling when you don't want to hurt another...but you have an on-going debate with yourself about whether it is truly more evil...to live a lie... Wishing you rest for your weary head... Hugs, Dee

Oh dear you have got problems, hopefully they came out in the wash. I enjoyed this poem. Ann