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Mia, you have explained the torment of the mind, can't sleep, mind like cuckoo cage, going round and round, night times worst, we toss and turn but thoughts stay on. You write so very well. 10

the wording, metaphar, style, flow, sequence of thought are all good. a bejewelled poem

i love this kind of dark sadness it always brings tears to my eyes.

(Pauses) ..Peace..we are longing for..all mankind anticipated in life... well implied write..nice introspection.. Ency Bearis

Theme and structural arrangement is good. But I feel somewhere, there is an element of incomplteness, which is rare in your writings. I guess the poet was too overwhelmed by the pounding emotion and thus colliding with the expression. I give you 8. Homs

Well narrated, scenic poetry......kudos.

this is just the kind of poem i like

great piece! ! ! ! write more!

wow! a great piece! thoughtful.........things explained finely! .........10++