Parallel Paradise Comments

Victoria, I have the strangest feeling that this poem is about autism? It is full of similes. The first stanza reads a little uncomfortable and you might wish to make it more metaphorical. eg. Her silence is like a vicious scream her voice a frightening lullaby she stares upon a ticking clock she summons to explode. Just an opinion which I feel improves the format, yours to discard at will. Hugz