Pain Liquefied Comments
As a molten drop of wax
runs down
from a dying candle,
a single drop of tear
...
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I am not going to rant and rave like Bri, what I read is the tears of a loved one crying will pain your heart. Thanks Valsa.
just to clarify: i understand that the tear made 'no sound' UNTIL it hit the............whatever it hit. the poem leaves enough 'to the imagination' of readers who like to 'read into things'. bri :)
HEY! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! I was NOT done with my comment, .......but it thought i was done and it submitted itself! ! let me repeat what was sent and finish it up this time............ from Google [thanks, Google]: 'de•noue•ment ˌdāno͞oˈmäN/ noun noun: denouement; plural noun: denouements; noun: dénouement; plural noun: dénouements the final part of a play, movie, or narrative in which the strands of the plot are drawn together and matters are explained or resolved. synonyms: finale, final scene, epilogue, coda, end, ending, finish, close; More culmination, climax, conclusion, resolution, solution the film's denouement antonyms: beginning the climax of a chain of events, usually when something is decided or made clear. I waited by the eighteenth green to see the denouement synonyms: outcome, upshot, consequence, result, end; informal payoff the debate had an unexpected denouement antonyms: origin - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i like the move from “without a sound” to “crashing”***. i normally would think of crashing as making a loud sound. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - while searching for a definition of the VERB …. [[interruption]] Now, continued: I found these definitions of “crashing” as an adjective; I thought they are new to me: “crashing adjective crash•ing \ ˈkra-shiŋ \ Definition of crashing 1: utter, absolute • a crashing bore 2: superlative • a crashing effect — crashingly play \ˈkra-shiŋ-lē\ adverb First Known Use: 1924 BUT THIS IS WHAT I WANTED TO SEE: “crash play verb \ ˈkrash \ • Definition of crash transitive verb 1 a: to break violently and noisily: smash b: to damage (an airplane) in landing 2 a: to cause to make a loud noise • crash the cymbals together b: to force (one's way) through with loud crashing noises 3: to enter or attend without invitation or without paying • crash the party 4: to move toward aggressively (as in fighting for a rebound) • basketball players crashing the boards 5: to cause (a computer system, component, or program) to crash intransitive verb 1 a: to break or go to pieces with or as if with violence and noise b: to fall, land, or hit with destructive force c: to decline suddenly and steeply d of a computer system, component, or program: to suffer a sudden major failure usually with attendant loss of data 2: to make a smashing noise • thunder crashing overhead 3: to move or force one's way with or as if with a crash • crashes into the room 4 slang: to experience the aftereffects (such as lethargy or depression) of a usually prolonged episode of drug use (as of amphetamines) 5 slang: to go to bed or fall asleep; also: to reside temporarily: stay • crashing with friends for a few days — crasher noun SO, unless a bystander is deaf, she/he would normally hear a tear crashing. Heh-heh. :) Ok, I like the poem. Now to see if I can make fun of its words, since the other comments are so serious! On second thought, I don’t have the inspiration today, and maybe it would not be apropos? [[“Definition of apropos : being both relevant and opportune • apropos comments First Known Use: 1686” ]] Bri :)
from Google [thanks, Google]: 'de·noue·ment ˌdāno͞oˈmäN/ noun noun: denouement; plural noun: denouements; noun: dénouement; plural noun: dénouements the final part of a play, movie, or narrative in which the strands of the plot are drawn together and matters are explained or resolved. synonyms: finale, final scene, epilogue, coda, end, ending, finish, close; More culmination, climax, conclusion, resolution, solution the film's denouement antonyms: beginning the climax of a chain of events, usually when something is decided or made clear. I waited by the eighteenth green to see the denouement synonyms: outcome, upshot, consequence, result, end; informalpayoff the debate had an unexpected denouement antonyms: origin - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i like the move from without a sound to crashing***. i normally would think of crashing as making a loud sound. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - while searching for a definition of the VERB
Hmm.....! Thank you soooooo much Bri for sparing so much of your precious time on my humble lines! I also greatly appreciate your effort at enlightening me with the nuances and shades of meaning of some of the words used. Your patience and interest at learning the subtle shades of meaning of words are beyond compare! Thank you once again!
Stunning! Here I get the image of a life, a sliver of humanity, withering like candle. A great poem, Valsa.
Tears fell down without a sound yet it ached the heart with a bursting sound. No wonder pain is liquefied. Tears captured in a wonderful way. Loved reading it.
Power of a droplet of a tear neatly captured in the poem.
A drop of tear can convey so much.....Thank you sir for your kind response! !
A poignant write. Beautiful imagery to depict heartache. Pain can tear us apart. A deep write. A10
You have described the grief and hemorrhaging pain of heartache and loss through your images of a dying candle 's molten wax and the woman's tears. It causes great distress to her man who is hurting from her pain. So well penned and hauntingly sad.10+++
Yes, a very sad moment is captured and I tried to give it a real feel! Somehow I think I can rely on your response and be assured that it has produced the desired effect! Thank you so much, Simone!
You created an evocative image of pain and sadness in very few words. Well done, Valsa!
Dear madam, you have hauntingly and amazingly drop down the arena of pain in a metaphorical beginning such as... ..As a molten drop of wax runs down from a dying candle, a single drop of tear left her eye's boundary making its way down and fell down without a sound, crashing into pieces! The power of drop is so cute that it can create great pain by crashing the heart pieces and can tear flesh. Beautifully presented.
Thank you Kumaramani sir! I enjoyed your observations about my poem!
Crying is part of our human emotional package – love it, or hate it.........Dr. Nick Knight. It's a reliever of pain and it's a remover of misunderstandings. Imagine the beauty of smile that comes only after tears. Valsa has selected a touching topic for her new poem and as always she has succeeded in writing a great poem.
I perfectly agree with the quote you have shared! Definitely it is a relief if one is able to melt one's sorrow in tears! Thank you Akhtar ji for your thoughtful and pleasing comment!
The destructive power of moral pain is unlimited. Here you have been able, thru your inspired words to transmit an earthquake of feelings thru a single tear. Your metaphors and similes, vivid and fantastically good. Like pulverized shards of glass it tore into his flesh... Truly amazing! The whole poem is truly Amazing!
Thank you so much Sandra for this wonderful comment........! When one can no more contain the pain, however hard one tries to hide it, it might manifest in the form of a tear! Such a drop of tear can cause a tsunami of grief in another, standing helpless!
crashing into pieces! The denouement of a sad life! It is with utmost sensitivity that you have treated the subject. Sometimes, the mental pressure building up inside a man goes beyond his control which proves fatal for him. Thanks for sharing the poem, Valsa ji.
Yes, I wanted this poem to be precisely sharp and intense! The pressure building inside one has to be left out at least in the form of a tear! Perhaps it is the final expression of a soul's long suppressed feelings of agony! Thank you sir for your empathetic read and analytical comment!
yes, it liquefies but changes the meaning of life, almost every time. one can feel absolute lonliness. very touching poem
A drop of tear can even change the course of one's life either for better or worse! Sometimes it may be the tip of an iceberg! Thank you Muhammed!
Thank you Paul! So happy to have your comment after a long break!
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7/30/2025 4:54:50 PM # 1.0.0
An excellent poem with an appropriate title and graphic. The language is above par. 'The denouement of a sad life! ' - what a befitting line in the middle, superbly placed just before the concluding stanza!