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Waiting for the clouds to pass away
And hide behind the darkening horizon
Waiting for the stars and moon to rise
Waiting to say good bye to the setting sun
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Beautiful...the transition of evening to night and your emotion at that hours is interestingly expressed....full score
3. The phrases "darkening clouds", setting sun", good bye", "solace", darkness ", "my sorrowful mind ", lwaiting for God" etc contribute to create an exceptional state of mind. Exquisitely written. Top score. Myfav
It is a great honor for me to get such wonderful comment from esteemed and great poet Sir. My regards.
2. But, the phrasing of the following lines, especially the second stanza adds to the sad melancholy mood conveyed by this phrase..
Beautiful poem. The choice of words and phrases makes it exquisite. The phrase "pass away" meaning "die" is used in such an innocent manner in the first line.. but,
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8/23/2025 11:12:41 AM # 1.0.0
Great write dear AKP. You are successful in bringing out the emotions in your heart