Friday, May 30, 2014

Out Of Space, Out Of Time Comments

Rating: 4.5

For I am not lost
I have been here before
Adrift in the darkest void
A somber vacuum will enrich all
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Christian Hudak
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Michelle Claus 19 June 2014

The feeling evoked is out of space and out of time. In starkness I am comforted by *Ferry light with you*... The shifting pronouns (from I to You) could be resolved by converting them all to We / Us - more collective, and consistent. I love this poem.

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Gajanan Mishra 30 May 2014

very fine, please read my poems and comment.

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