our love was like a fish out the sea,
like a blind person who couldn't see,
like a star that was no longer bright,
our love was a struggling fight
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your way of writing is facsinating.never stop writing.This poem was nice too...
A very good flow of feel and expressions...very good lines
I enjoy reading your poem. It questions what love 'was' and I wonder 'why'.
nicely written..but why the love so vulnerable...crippled...? very touching.....it gives a pinch in my heart... your piece is very convincing.....10+++++
I like the next to last line: 'our love was, our love is? ' which communicates that things are still evolving and nothing that's so real is ever truly a closed book.
Another wonderful writin lov poem... Sensitive and hav deep emotions of lov...
OoHh..! amazing poem i swear.. where did u get this from..? !
Differnt view to describe love...words are simple and touching...great work..! ! !
Beautifully written, great rhythm and flow to the peice. Job well done! :)
I can relate to this... I like how you compared your love to a crime. It felt so wrong, it felt so right.
Nice style to this poem, sums up the kind of relationships many of us find ourselves in.
i love this! ! beautiful writing. la verdad. :)