Wednesday, January 14, 2009

Our Love Was. Comments

Rating: 4.9

our love was like a fish out the sea,
like a blind person who couldn't see,
like a star that was no longer bright,
our love was a struggling fight
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JOSE MURGUIA
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Cynthia Ulloa 02 January 2010

i love this! ! beautiful writing. la verdad. :)

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Mahsa Mahdavi 24 September 2009

your way of writing is facsinating.never stop writing.This poem was nice too...

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C. P. Sharma 14 February 2009

Good rhyme, rhythm and flow but narrow focus on love. CP

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Kelli Richards 13 February 2009

i love how you compare love to these different things.

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Kranthi Pothineni 13 February 2009

A very good flow of feel and expressions...very good lines

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 23 January 2009

I enjoy reading your poem. It questions what love 'was' and I wonder 'why'.

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Miriam Maia Padua 20 January 2009

nicely written..but why the love so vulnerable...crippled...? very touching.....it gives a pinch in my heart... your piece is very convincing.....10+++++

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Patti Masterman 19 January 2009

I like the next to last line: 'our love was, our love is? ' which communicates that things are still evolving and nothing that's so real is ever truly a closed book.

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sumaira .....ir 19 January 2009

Another wonderful writin lov poem... Sensitive and hav deep emotions of lov...

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Mark Fenton 19 January 2009

Nice clear imagery that does justice to the subject. Bravo!

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Dolan Doran 18 January 2009

it has an interesting beat to it. good similes...

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Argenis Hernandez 18 January 2009

my fingers snap throughout this poem. well done

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Dark Gurl 55 18 January 2009

OoHh..! amazing poem i swear.. where did u get this from..? !

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Sunand Sharma 17 January 2009

Differnt view to describe love...words are simple and touching...great work..! ! !

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John Smith 17 January 2009

Beautifully written, great rhythm and flow to the peice. Job well done! :)

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Salute! Written with clarity!

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Brenda Arroyo 16 January 2009

I can relate to this... I like how you compared your love to a crime. It felt so wrong, it felt so right.

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DELETED NOW 15 January 2009

that is really nice I am going to add it to my favs

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John Fieldson 14 January 2009

Nice style to this poem, sums up the kind of relationships many of us find ourselves in.

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Sid John Gardner. 14 January 2009

Nice one about this sites greates topic..10 MARKS. Sid.

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