Orphans Lament. Comments

Strikes a true note. Well written and to the point poem.10.

Hi John - Excellent structure - four quatrians and a consistent rhymimg pattern. It has flow and recites well. Good content - it scores a MAX. The things felt by your orphan paint pictures of neglect and despair. Small - abandoned - unloved - neglected - lonely - empty silent and fragile. there are also some lovely descriptors of these feelings. I like the last two lines which give a nice fatalistic conclusion to an excellent poem. 'But do not shed tears over me - for this is every orphans sad lament. Yours in poetry - JOHN.