Friday, April 27, 2012

Original Version: The Candle Comments

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The unction cools; the saving taper glows,
Dripping strands of sacramental brede.
The priest, his missal splayed like wings, bestows
The rite. The sliding bedside curtains cede
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William F Dougherty
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Jim Hogg 23 October 2012

Seems we've lost quotation marks on this site now...

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Jim Hogg 23 October 2012

My blood seems churned with fiction.. swallows its small fame and other phrases give this an immediacy and intensity that seems to me to lift it above the revised version... I found myself holding my breath by the end of line 8..

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Bulletcookie 2017 03 May 2012

Out, out brief candle? Your poem is like watching a spider build its web in the evening light. Spell binding and natural.

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William F Dougherty

William F Dougherty

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