Only The Murderer Can Heal Me Comments

i like this poem, and several of the lines i liked especially, including: Cause your rejection Shook my walls So hard That the ceiling Came slamming down .......................very easy to picture. sounds like my stepdaughter's woe. : ( and: There are only One set of hands That can mend these Shards..................................though i would write IS ONLY ONE not are only one and: He's the one that Let me fall And still He cares Not one bit Not at all - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my online research claims that dieing, MANY years ago, may have been the 'accepted' spelling for DYING (which is what you want to use in this poem, UNLESS you want to be different and claim poetic license) . ******* to confuse matters more, perhaps, : DIEING DOES mean: : To cut, form, or stamp with or as if with a die. AND: DYEING means: to stain something with color, AND OF COURSE dying, dieing, and dyeing are pronounced the same way (or at least they are by ME) ! ! ! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - and look for a typo in Then I'd be a light To bright for your... - - - - - - - - - and: [yes, i'm picky. i don't mean to offend, but just to be helpful. i hope you are NOT offended. please let me know if you are.] in these lines: Within my veins My body screams to me Your heart is physically Dieing i believe more punctuation in the poem would help readers like me to NOT start to read them as two separate sentences: ..................... Within my veins my body screams to me.....AND..... Your heart is physically dieing [sic]. [[ IF THESE WERE SEPARATE SENTENCES, it might be interpreted as if it is not the speaker's heart which is dying, but the heart of another (the bad guys?) . ]] ......................when i THINK YOU WANT THE LINES READ AS one sentence: Within my veins my body screams to me Your heart is physically dieing [sic]. ========================== thanks for sharing. i'll send this to MyPoemList. :) bri i wonder if you got this from a personal experience or someone elses/else's? or your imagination. well-written in any case.