Saturday, March 24, 2007

Only Teasing Comments

Rating: 4.0

My spirit is on its knees
My will is willing to give up
My heart is unrecognizable, bludgened, bleeding, bruised and broken
Years of seaching...for What?
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Vicky Biorseth
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Matthew Wise 21 November 2015

Still love you

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Matthew Wise 21 November 2015

Not right loves you

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Matthew Wise 21 November 2015

Not right

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Pranab K Chakraborty 16 January 2015

Sufficient spoken by words just to be recognized. Sufficient to be alone to catch the thread of love. Good write.

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Bernard Snyder 15 January 2015

Thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem, Vicky! Also, congrats on this poem being chosen as 'poem of the day''. Well-deserved! .

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John Richter 15 January 2015

There is nothing more emotion-provoking then new or lost love..... which is why poems about such are plentiful. You will never outperform the likes of Shakespeare, Browning, or Angelou in such things... You have talent. I'm jaded, but still will suggest you write about things that you find in life - not about things you want in life... From Amy Lowell - A Decade When you came ....you were like red wine and honey, And the taste of you burnt ........my mouth with its sweetness. Now you are like morning bread, Smooth and pleasant, I hardly taste you at all, for I know your savor, But I am completely nourished. Remove yourself from your poetry - read it undetached. Does it evoke the same commonality that Amy stressed? Love poetry can be wonderful - but it must be superb or it is nothing but an idle thought.

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Kim Barney 15 January 2015

Very nice, except for the misspelled word mentioned by Babatunde Aremu. Congratulations for having it selected as poem of the day on January 15 for three years in a row now!

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Babatunde Aremu 15 January 2015

Talking of human emotion which is temporal. Nice write but do you mean to say 'bludgeoned'?

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Malini Kadir 15 January 2014

playful......memory to with time erase

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Anil Kumar Panda 15 January 2014

very nice.short and sweet.liked it.

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Leslie Philibert 15 January 2014

Like the expanded couplet in the last three lines, the capital in What surprises..a good poem

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Alistair Graham 15 January 2014

Reflection At night when you climb into bed The thoughts of the day in your head Do you drift into sleep Or fall into the deep Fine-linen, debating, bedstead

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 15 January 2013

sometimes, we escape from reality using ' only teasing '! well done!

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Tony Karas 15 January 2013

(((hug))) I know how that feels. Nice write.

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