Thursday, October 25, 2012

One Of Those Birds Comments

Rating: 3.6

Those birds are playing Hide and Seek,
But one of them is very weak.
Now they start to compile,
Husk and grains with their peak.
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Akanksha Bhatt
COMMENTS
Jordan Black 24 May 2013

Very good well written birds are often associated with beauty and the use of a nest as a metaphor very good.

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Valerie Dohren 13 January 2013

No wealth without health - very true Akanksha. Nice write.

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Sandy Player 04 January 2013

Very interesting views you take out of nature. Birds need to catch up and create a welfare state!

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Justin Gonzalez 06 December 2012

Very beautiful and interesting. I really enjoyed this great read. :)

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Rishit Desai 30 November 2012

Beautifully brought out.

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Vishal Sharma 15 November 2012

good flow of rhyme u make me remember wordsworth... keep it up

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Indrajeet Mishra 05 November 2012

Very niceeee! Incredible So nice with great thought

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Unwritten Soul 02 November 2012

The idea is big but you carry it with the whole strength you got...poetry way! _Soul

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Indranil Bhaduri 02 November 2012

Very sweetly penned. loved this

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A poem good enough to throw light on Miss Akanksha`s future prospects as a strong poet. The theme has a piercing element and is realistic in totality. Go ahead like this Akanksha.

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Antonio Liao 30 October 2012

sweet as a bird....a potential poem for Children Library...easy and inspiring to read 10/10

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So Close 28 October 2012

great thought....! ! ! and i wish appreciate for that....good job...keep it up....: -) »so close«

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Chandra Thiagarajan 28 October 2012

At such a young age, I feel, you have got great talent and insight.A nice poem.I liked it.Thanks and wishing you a great life with poetry. Chandra Thiagarajan

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Yash Shinde 27 October 2012

meaningful..........and really elegant in its simplicity....... :)

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Jahan Zeb 27 October 2012

I liked the way you have used the weak bird....... I like the parallel structure of the two stanza and the last two lines clearly telling the reason. Very nice.

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Guess Who 26 October 2012

Meaningful and well written as simple as possible liked it

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Smrutikant Nayak 26 October 2012

fabulous.....so true......

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Akanksha Bhatt

Akanksha Bhatt

Dehradun India
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