Saturday, May 3, 2008

One More Comments

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One more tomorrow that'll never come
One more time that I'll feel numb
One more lie that will be told
One more time for me to fold
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Julie Neises
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Greenwolfe 1962 16 June 2008

The repetition is fine but the last two lines need to rhyme. GW62

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