Saturday, May 31, 2008

One Day Comments

Rating: 2.5

One day I'll be free
Just you wait and see
Free to myself
All my treasures on that shelf
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Alyssa Boccardo
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Greenwolfe 1962 01 June 2008

This one is not written very well. The rhymes are just quite there. Perhaps a different approach will achieve your objective. GW62

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Alyssa Boccardo

Alyssa Boccardo

Phillidalphia, PA
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