Sunday, October 23, 2005

On The Rails Comments

Rating: 4.9

Phew! This department if so unbearably stifling,
The whole populace is frantically rifling,
Through loads of clothes, hanging up for inspection,
Either for your acceptance, or for your rejection,
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Ernestine Northover
COMMENTS
Emily Henson 16 August 2008

Very true. It seems at sales people bu stuff just so other people wont...CRAZY

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Duncan Wyllie 09 May 2006

The changing shapes of our expectations on how we think we should look, ERNESTINE, THE SHAPE OF YOUR WORDS IS ALL THAT TRULY MATTERS AND YOUR WORDS ARE IN GOOD FORM. Love Duncan

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Linda Hepner 27 October 2005

Sales drive me right off the rails, Ernestine! I do like your energy and humor, and the refrain! Linda

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Uriah Hamilton 24 October 2005

I hate shopping but this is a fun cool poem!

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Raynette Eitel 23 October 2005

Ernestine, there's hardly a woman alive who won't identify with this, and it appears a few men just love the way it is written! Nice poem. Raynette

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Max Reif 23 October 2005

Dear Ernestine, I think you catch many of the aspects of such a sale. And I like your form, with the short, rhyming 'trailer lines', that does it too, mimics the frantic atmosphere of a sale, somehow! You have the jargon that puts me right there. A few of the rhymes, like 'acceptance' and 'rejection', seemed a little too easy, and a skirt 'way above the knee' gives you the rhyme, but I think doesn't do justice these days to skirts that are only slightly below the ____! : -)

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David Nelson Bradsher 23 October 2005

What a wonderful journey this one takes the reader on, Ernestine. My favorite of yours thus far.

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