On The Eve Comments

Seduction is an art, not everyone is adept at.

**** only 4 stars this time. bri : )

[[cont.]] *** 'TONGUE IN CHEEK | English meaning - Cambridge Dictionary adjective [ before noun ] uk / ˌtʌŋ.ɪnˈtʃiːk / us / ˌtʌŋ.ɪnˈtʃiːk / meant to be understood as a joke, although it might appear to be serious'

I WONDER how much is 'tongue-in-cheek' humor. You have humor as a topic (among others) . Gee, maybe I should NOT use the 'tongue in cheek' *** reference here; you might go crazy. [[ cont. ]]]

(cont.) Maybe your poem's title should be On The Eve Of Seduction, .....OR Destruction! ! ! ! [[ Eve of Destruction' is a protest song written by P. F. Sloan in mid-1965.[4] Several artists have recorded it, but the most popular recording was by Barry McGuire.' ]]

The lines I favor most: 'I think you understand what I'm sayin', and I think you know, that I'm not playin' cause I've told you, over and over and over again my friend that what I need, immediately, is seduction.' (cont.)

'wanna to be' I say should be 'wanna be'. You really ARE suffering, aren't ya? ?

'desperate'? ? Maybe try: 'The Best G-Spot Vibrator: Lelo Mona' 'Hell to pay' is kind of harsh! ! ! ; (

AND here as well: 'but there are definitely times, I feel less devoted.' Hey, I'm just sayin'. Are you partying too much or TOO LITTLE? You look like life is good in your photos.

Hey, anais, tell me what I see today in this: 'Life without you's, less fun, than as I was hoping, '...., which I say is 'wrong'. : )