Monday, February 17, 2014

On A Snowy Sunday Comments

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Tiny droplets of water on the window pane
a unique making, silent steps of glory
a billion feathers that hath hatched
one little room, the intellect decided on a holiday
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PRIYANKA BHANDARKAR
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Roseann Shawiak 13 March 2014

Your thoughts are good, imagery great, but I have a hard time reading it, because sentences run together and don't make sense that way. Maybe try reading books in English, and noticing the punctuation, especially ending sentences before going onto the next one. Look forward to reading more of your poetry. RoseAnn

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Priyanka Bhandarkar 10 November 2016

Here I am talking about a snowman build by children.!

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