Old Love Affair Comments

A soft green touchy expression on love. Love with 10 Onelia.

A very fine poem. Remembering an old love affair, once a venture now seems childish, in such a sophisticated and symbolic way is a real delight of your poetry. I think everyone has this venture in his/her life............10/10. Best Wishes Naseer

I love this poem Onelia... its imagery is second to none. Bravo. HG: -) xx

measuring... in tea spoons and chipped cups!

So much truth in this. Spoons do, of course, exist to stir...... and yes. So much in so few words. t x

Love the symbolism you have created in this richly observed and deeply reflective poem. There is much to draw upon in these few brief lines - another memorable and original write here Onelia. j xx

I can't beat Janice's wonderful critique of this soulful poem..... Other then to say it gives measure to the heady heights a new love always brings. rx

I so love this! I adore the porcelain being struck and the porcelain being striken witm memories and loss and regret. This is a perfect tuning fork of a poem which resonates now with happiness now with sadness but hits the note that can shatter a heart and tell the tale of what is past that swirls into view with all its bitter sweetness. Beautifully crafted and perfectly Proustian. love Dónall Dónall

the things that trigger memories Emotions that we can't control can spring to mind with greatest ease although I think that on the whole We can look back nostalgically recalling how things used to be. As we sit and drink our tea with few regrets quite probably

I love the emotional timbre of this one - neither happy nor sad, but quietly reflective - almost transcendental in fact. Yes, porcelain does that - cracked or not and tea does too. Images that carry the reader with you on your nostalgic journey. A fine poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Lovely, One. A Proustian moment, when a little piece of sense data like a teaspoon tinkling on a cup transports you back to a moment when you were somewhere else, your mind and feelings directed somewhere else. The 'sugar avalanche'... to be buried in sweetness that couldn't last, in contrast with more binding and deep attachments... the 'venture' dissolved after hopes that it would be meaningful, not a storm in a teacup...The suggestion of sadness and loss in your image of bone, conjured up by association with bone china, smoothed and refined to transparency and now entangled with the idea of transience and death. ... so much feeling suggested in these few throw-away words.

That's very interesting...quite contemplative i'd say....i'm not sure i fully understand it, but i do like the imagery/word usage. i especially like the tea tie in, but personally i prefer coffee- bold ;)

Sofia, whatever you touch upon turns into gold. The stricken porcelain, perhaps, is the climax of the bizarre about the old love affair. The imagery bears your imprint.

I would like to quote Horace here 'ut pictura poesis' (A poem is like a painting.) ... This is the true beauty of a poet, when he/she handles and executes a simple naive thought with the beauty of imagination and art is nothing but the extension of our raw imaginations... The broader you can look the more area you cover in a single glance and sometimes you focus at a little ignored thing and make it a masterpiece by the beauty of your vision... You have that talent my friend... Keep it up... Regards, Kamran

Beautiful analogy about the delicacy and yet hardwariness of bone china. I love the picture you painted here Onelia, it is especially tender and yet shows strength of character from the writer, HG: -) xx

What is the impact of this affair? The enigma of femininity is never in the lack of trust in man. Sometimes boy has less trust in himself than girl has in him and he has in her.

What is chinaware? Something exceptionally fine, strong and resistent to the warmth but at the same time very fragile. A refined, delicate memory from the past comes as well as the tea in its cup.

good one Sofia, but i never understand why all true love stories ends up in pain...yeah but i love that pain...

insightful...an affair once sweet then came gloomy and rest is history written in a soft and charming way...so graceful. a 10.