Old Designs Comments
I'm at an (outdoor) dinner, with Peter, some of his doctoral-student friends, professors and their spouses, to kick-off the Fall semester and Peter's second year in the doctoral program.
A 60-ish professor asked Peter, 'So, what impressions did you take away from your time at the Large Hadron Collider? ' In this setting, as a student pursuing his doctorate, Peter's comments will probably be noted and there's a watching anticipation.
...
Read full text
'Parentheses are used for afterthoughts and to add additional information to a sentence (like so) . This information or afterthought is known as a "parenthesis" and should always be enclosed in brackets, dashes, or commas. The text within the parentheses is not vital to the sentence.'
I esp. like stanza 10, BUT I say you have two digressions in it which I would put into parentheses/brackets. I DON'T KNOW THE ways an English professor would say to handle the digressions.
I don't use parentheses because they aren't used for descriptions in novels.
stanza 9: I esp. like 'shards of information'. Are you an Archaeology student at Yale?
'and by the way, he looks adorable in the soft light of the dancing Japanese lanterns -' I like your digression here. If this is a true story, I THINK you like Peter, a lot. ;)
Delivering Poems Around The World
Poems are the property of their respective owners. All information has been reproduced here for educational and informational purposes to benefit site visitors, and is provided at no charge...
7/29/2025 2:05:00 AM # 1.0.0
Yes, stanza 10 is VERY humorous. ;))))))))))) I'd use 'While' in front of 'Sophy'. STOP giggling, you teenager! I guess you and Peter may have to research Peter's latest 'theory'' in 'the lab'.
Thanks, I think it works because it comes out of a the earlier, dry place.