Wednesday, January 18, 2006

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Rating: 4.8

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With yellow pages
And a broken spine
Or a corkscrew
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Dave Birss
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Ernestine Northover 18 January 2006

Yep, that's what I thought you wanted to say, but I wouldn't have liked to have been so forward. Love Ernestine XXX

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Ernestine Northover 18 January 2006

Loved this one Dave, but wasn't quite sure of the last two lines, I felt a little bit left in mid-air, am I missing something, or have I not quite got the point, can you enlighten me. Love Ernestine XXX

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Chuck Audette 18 January 2006

I like this - the rhymes becoming more and more fluid. Just wondering..it seems like your last line got dropped. Seems like it should end with a 'that way'. Or is that intentional (you were all used up?) . If so, cute. -chuck

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