Monday, February 29, 2016

Oh My Dadi(Grandma) Comments

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It feels like everything is finished,
you were the only one who completes my family,

I missed those golden times,
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DEEPANSHU MALIK
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Bri Edwards 09 April 2016

I agree with Kelly Kurt. À suggestion....Use apostrophe to form the contraction of it is, like you did with i am. Thanks for sharing. Bri ☺

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Edward Kofi Louis 24 March 2016

I missed those golden times! But, there is still hope ahead of you. Nice work.

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Deepanshu Malik 25 March 2016

thanks for the suggestion sir

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Kelly Kurt 24 March 2016

I am sorry for your loss, Deepanshu. Yes, writing is good therapy and you have expressed your love and sorrow very nicely here. There are some rough parts with your English, but all in all a well written, emotional poem. Keep writing. Peace

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Deepanshu Malik 25 March 2016

thanks sir for the suggestion, I am improving my English.

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