Of Mice And Men Again (A Senyru) Comments
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hello it has a different style and theme.. this is a cynical, humorous catching men' foibles.. you are good in both short and long poem, very skilful and clever comparative
The bestest laid plans of mice and men done went and ganged agley today.........ths funny poem regarding failure that you have taken this famous quotation from Robert Burns is much interesting.
it added amusement to repeat part of it in his native language especially since the sounds of the letters and words were so agley in and of themselves!
We usually make foolish and funny things with a chalk on a black board, the teacher erases it with a hidden smile without reading it. So what if a lovely write was also erased unread by the teacher!
? ? ? I am not seeing the relevance... are you on the correct page? I know my computer flips from poem to poem and sometimes w/o me knowing it's skipped to another poem
ahhhh, I see- -please excuse my confusion, I must have been brain-dead that day!
a lovely comparison. mice and man......... and the best laid plans. thank u dear Susan....... i smiled. tony
I had fun playing games with that old quotation by Burns- -glad you enjoyed a chuckle, tony!
The best laid plans of mice and men gang aft agley......such a sentence in the OED is reborn here!
Had some fun with this famous quotation from Robert Burns- -I have a feeling he chuckled at my playful attempt at humor
Richard Wlodarski- - -Since the reply box isn't working, I have to use the comment box to reply. Thank you, Richard, it is so good to hear that you enjoy my whacky sense of humor. I do love making people smile- -there is so much strife and stress and grief in life I just want people to feel good even if briefly because maybe that moment of laughter helps them get back to the battlefield feeling strengthened.
What a brilliant write! To be able to make the reader smile while reading about failure, is the stroke of poetic genius! ! Thoroughly enjoyed it! Especially, the last line. Thank you, Susan for making me smile.
Richard - - -Since the reply box wasntt working, I had to use the comment box to reply. But now it works... soooo... Thank you, Richard, it is so good to hear that you enjoy my whacky sense of humor. I do love making people smile- -there is so much strife and stress and grief in life I just want people to feel good even if briefly because maybe that moment of laughter helps them get back to the battlefield feeling strengthened.
Hi Susan, A clever write that sets you thinking. Of men and mice! Of plans going astray! Interesting Senryu :)
Such an intriguing line that man wrote and once I read it the phrase ganged agley just stuck there in my brain ready to pop out and sound so accident-ridden!
Interesting write. Best senryu. Enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.
I am pleased that you found enjoyment because I enjoyed the heck out of writing it! ! ! !
Sofia, it has been so long since I have seen you! ! ! I hope this means that you and your fantastic pen are back amongst us again for a long long time!
Thank you for reading it! I always enjoyed the original language of this saying.
nice and I learned something new today... ganged agley (today) .
I get tickled by the strangest things- -when I saw that the original said ganged agley I fell heads over heels for the phrase!
Haikus and senyrus are good for me to write since I have a tendency to go on and on about something when in all actuality one single word could have sufficed.... see what I mean? ;)
Very Cute! ! ! ! ! Excellently Done! ! ! ! ! Strongly Put! ! ! ! ! ..... Many Many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ++++++ May You Find Many Smiles! ! ! ! ! Thank You For Sharing This! ! ! ! !
Hey Rebecca, glad you had fun reading this- it was fun writing this. The original lines in the native language have always tickled my weird sense of humor! !
Och aye, ma wee lassie. A bokkle a single malt to ye! A bonnie beastie of a poem. And now in English... Two of my favourite writers come together, , correction... three including Saucy Susan!
You are a delightful fellow writer, Tom. I never know what you are going to say. Thank you for including me in your list of favorite writers coming together in this. For some reason that ganged agley phrase has always stuck in my mind. Maybe its the tag line for my life. Give that furry purry hot water bottle a piece of turkey from me, okay?
Bobbie Burns meets John Steinbeck. Really well done, Susan. A 10.
Hi Susan, Plans mice or men lay Totally they go awry At His divine wish Of His sabre, in a swish. A 100++ for the sabre of a Senryu...
I'm pleased to read your comment poem! You and Sandra make them an art form! ! ! I've always loved these lines equating men's plans with mice plans- -should bring haughty mankind down a little! Thank you for the rating for this Senyru, my friend.
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Thank you, Soran. I am Woman- I have Mood Swings that wood put a squirrel to shame! ! I like experimenting with different poem lengths and forms. You are so kind in your remarks about my poems- -very Kind