Of Legal Age Comments

Thanks for making your mark Rose Marie and for honoring your parents!

Loved your fourth stanza. You are fortunate to have such lovely parents who have not only given you exposure but also inculcated the values in you how to stand on your own feet.

I am inexpressible for this very lovely poem of gratitude to parents. Awesome Madam.

Still my heart/Is fretful/And afraid/That I might not/Make on my own/All alone........brilliant expression! Each stanza of this fabulous poem is worthy of appreciation!

Glad that I can walk alone The path of life Without a cane And make a mark Of my own... Still i am afraid........ the protective and caring parents and your experiences made the person who you are..... thank u for your poem. tony

A disciplined life is definitely leading toward successful life. An inspiring write, dear ate Rose...10++++

A fortunate person is one supported by love.

Still my heart Is fretful.....wonderful expression! A marvelous work! My great pleasure reading it time and again!

A lovely piece on journey of the self. As to the last para, that is the true heritage, discipline, good values and the like. As to Bri Edwards point on punctuation, many believe that poetry should have some deliberate under-punctuation so as to create confusion. Well, I feel only if both the interpretations are indicated by the poet, not otherwise. I liked what I read.

Great parents know what they are doing.

But, my loving parents Have imparted A fortune: A discipline Solid as a rock That I can hold onto For life.........that is why you have successfully grown into a person of character! Excellent write!

A splendid introduction has been made on Legal age. Let it be cited here..... .I traveled the world For eighteen long years Wrapped in the arms Of loving parents The sail was smooth That made life Worth living for Beautiful poem so nicely executed. Second visit values more.

But, my loving parents Have imparted A fortune: A discipline Solid as a rock That I can hold onto For life. a nice gratitude to the parents.

A parent's job is well done when they have lead children into safe independence. Showing them the way to go. Another excellent write.++10

Glad that I can walk alone The path of life Without a cane And make a mark Of my own........nice expression with nice theme. The last stanza is much impressive. Beautiful poem shared. Thanks.Thanks.

(continued) ...obviously 'you' have a head on your shoulders i.e. you have some brains and i think your quandary will be settled, hopefully for both you AND your parents. OF COURSE, maybe this poem is NOT about you at all. poems sometimes sound so believable and readers assume that the poet is writing about themselves. i have just abandoned that assumption for this poem & you. bri ;)

(continued) ..maybe you and i should 'get together'? you bring the money; i'll wash the dishes and mow the lawn. oh, i forgot! i'm married. you do look young, but i think you are a little older than 18/19. hmm? i would write hold onto, not hold unto. am i wrong? are we both correct? what do the readers say? not that i'd believe all of them. (continued) ...

(continued) ...crane? ? ? as in 'a piece of construction equipment' OR a large bird? ? maybe you mean cane? ? ? Make on my own........i'd use Make it on my own or use some other word(s) to explain, better, your meaning. maybe you meant to use it? a fortune? ? ? you are RICH/wealthy/rolling in dough? ? (continued) ..

the sail? you lived on a sailing yacht with your parents for 18 years? or is sail used figuratively, for an adventure, an odyssey? i'm having a problem interpreting the 2nd stanza, perhaps partly due to the lack of punctuation. taking out That in 2nd stanza's 2nd line, and putting a semicolon there would satisfy me! the word clutches sounds ominous to me. (continued) ...

You should strongly believe in you! I like the fourth stanza most! …”Glad that I can walk alone/The path of life Without a crane/And make a mark Of my own”….Yes, you can absolutely do it… bless you!