Thursday, November 7, 2019

Of Aging Faces Comments

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I pictured vast arrangements in
the depths beyond this planet's sky
I saw the multitude of things
that hurtle, spin, begin and die;
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jim hogg
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Bri Edwards 07 December 2019

i enjoyed especially stanzas 5 & 6 so far, all have been good for me. in stanza 7: does " fixed" mean (1) repaired, or (2) 'fastened' or 'established'? i think 'fixed'. i like the rhyming and 'flow' and the punctuation, though i'd change some, is very good. i like how some sentences flow from one stanza to another! ok. to MyPoemList. bri :)

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Jim Hogg 09 December 2019

Bri, hi..again, thanks for taking the time to read this... and " A Bee Reflects" . " Fixed" here means unchanging/unchangeable. The flow (rhythm/metre) is the very common iambic tetrameter(quadrameter) .

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