I drifted off throughout that night,
My breath held deep in thrall to art
With words I felt but didn't write -
They fled my pen; I couldn't start.
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Good job, my friend - very well said. I have no problem with 'wist' and 'oft', but then I am a fan of the old classics.
I feel that i relate to this stunning poem! ! well done, this is a 10++ HBH
This is wonderful. The more I read it, the more I like it, particularly the final stanza. You really captured the true writing experience of the poet. Thanks for this lovely poem. Raynette
I had a change the poem slightly. I thought it would be more accessible if I used the word 'knew' instead of 'wist', and I replaced 'oft' with 'off' because 'oft' throughout' is hard to pronounce, and listening people would hear 'off' anyway. Using 'off' slightly changes the meaning of the first line, but it still works. Using 'wist' was just me being a smartass.. there was no compelling reason to do so.
david you have attempted to do a poem using old english with a modern twist you have courage, it is not bad keep doing it, i like to use it for comedic effect people find it humorous, like my spelling Regards AJS
wonderful..i really enjoyed it