Thursday, May 26, 2005

Ode To Words I Didn'T Write Comments

Rating: 4.3

I drifted off throughout that night,
My breath held deep in thrall to art
With words I felt but didn't write -
They fled my pen; I couldn't start.
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David Zvekic
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Sallie Howson 11 June 2005

wonderful..i really enjoyed it

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Wildwood Slim 09 June 2005

Good job, my friend - very well said. I have no problem with 'wist' and 'oft', but then I am a fan of the old classics.

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Ivy Christou 31 May 2005

I feel that i relate to this stunning poem! ! well done, this is a 10++ HBH

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Raynette Eitel 30 May 2005

This is wonderful. The more I read it, the more I like it, particularly the final stanza. You really captured the true writing experience of the poet. Thanks for this lovely poem. Raynette

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David Zvekic 27 May 2005

I had a change the poem slightly. I thought it would be more accessible if I used the word 'knew' instead of 'wist', and I replaced 'oft' with 'off' because 'oft' throughout' is hard to pronounce, and listening people would hear 'off' anyway. Using 'off' slightly changes the meaning of the first line, but it still works. Using 'wist' was just me being a smartass.. there was no compelling reason to do so.

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Allan James Saywell 26 May 2005

david you have attempted to do a poem using old english with a modern twist you have courage, it is not bad keep doing it, i like to use it for comedic effect people find it humorous, like my spelling Regards AJS

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David Zvekic 26 May 2005

Dedicated to all frustrated poets.

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