Monday, August 14, 2023

Ode To Diamond Comments

Rating: 4.5

You are a diamond, so regally crowned,
sparkling with brilliance, always renowned.

In the eyes of the penniless, you gleam,
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M. Asim Nehal
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Poetic Sky 25 August 2023

Every heart yeans Diamond, if not in actual at least symbolical.

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Juhaina Tumlu 22 August 2023

Stand out lines specially for woman 'In every form, you shine, an everlasting light, bringing joy and wonder, by day or night.:

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Poetic Sky 22 August 2023

For me this poem is Awesome.

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

3 stars : )

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

I think I'd much prefer a more colorful gem in my crown, ring, necklace, or etc. MY CROWN, usually only worn at home or at special parties, has rubies, sapphires, aquamarines, sapphires, and emeralds. A few pearls are nice. bri : )

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

stanza 7 is my LEAST LIKED (least-liked) stanza, esp. the use of 'sincere' at its end. I hope you revise THAT! Hm? ?

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

'EVERY heart's desire' is [[of course]] a stretch of the imagination. But, hey! , this is POETRY. : ) bri

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

I'd guess when Queen Elizabeth (RIP) rarely wore her crown, its weight from metal and jewels was (for her) a literal 'pain in the neck'. : )))

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

st.6: 'A gem of beauty, for others to admire, a symbol of strength, every heart's desire.' It's not (to me) perfectly clear if you mean 'every heart's desire' is a diamond or is 'strength'.

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

Regarding stanza 3: 'Rough or raw diamonds are uncut and unpolished gemstones that haven't been altered or tampered with after being discovered. Raw diamonds look like transparent stones with brownish or yellowish tints.'

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

(cont.) 'alas ə-lăs′ interjection Used to express sorrow, regret, grief, compassion, or apprehension of danger or evil.'

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

stanza 2: well thought and expressed ...However, a 'penniless' person might wish more for a good meal once a day. : ( Alas, the inequity on this planet. (cont.)

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Bri Edwards 16 August 2023

line 1: I think I'd add 'ring' after 'diamond'. Otherwise it sounds like a diamond is crowned by a diamond. THAT would be like saying: 'BRI's (poetic) BRI-lliance is BRI-lliant.'

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Brian De-Costa 14 August 2023

I know Diamond is precious and costly. It has the light of its own to shine at night, I liked your ode which explains the quality, value and its importance.

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