You dont show it always
but I know that you care.
Your My unknown friend
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Very nice friendly lines The more I get to know you The more I know my self An open invitation to all unknown friends Now it is me I think. Good poem.ROHAN -KAVIN CHARALAN
your poem is fascinating for me. it remembered me a story about Guardian-Angels)))) Unknown Friend - is a spirit by you, he smiles when you are happy and cries when sadness comes into your soul... I like the poem, it has good meaning and nice way of writing. keep it up. future belongs to you
I enjoyed this poem. Though, there are some tense issues present (I suppose they could be in there on purpose) . The repetition coupled with the short, two-line stanzas give the poem an almost childish demeanor - very reminiscent of Dr. Seuss. Perhaps it is the message that is seussical, as well. Overall, the poem works and is well written. The only problem I had with it is the last line, and it's not really a problem, per se. The word 'gonna' just feels so out of place with the rest of the diction choices. When I read the line it stopped me. I haven't decided if it was a good or bad stop.
This poet has yet to master his craft; juvenilia at best.