Monday, May 22, 2017

Ode To A Pill Comments

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You that promises, terestial paradise
to you i give thee a garland of faded magenta carnations
i begin witness to nirvana, and a foamy sea
ive been playing with my instrument
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Cristobal Benjumea
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Jefferson Carter 22 May 2017

Cristobal, I like that you didn't rhyme here. You do need to get a better grip on English. Too many ESL problems. Maybe read some good contemporary poetry in English? If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me what you think of it. Yrs, JC

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