Friday, April 17, 2009

Ocean Of Stars Comments

Rating: 2.0

As I drift through space alone,
I hear a man yell over the radio,
“It'll be ok! ”
I click the radio off,
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Tyler Smith
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Gwendolyn Miller 06 May 2009

Dear Tyler I really enjoyed your poem. I loved the idea and how you wrote it.

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SAM Mitsuki 27 April 2009

This is incredibly sad but really deep. I loved it!

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Ashleigh Michaud 23 April 2009

....... who knew u were so deep? i love it alot. poems aren't so bad after all huh? trying to think of an amazingly long n giant word to describe ur writing is difficult, but i did like it very much. cant wait to read more.

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Brittanie Thornton 23 April 2009

OK! This is really amazing, yet very sad. But I love it anyway, it makes me think! Great job! !

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Angel Uchiyama 23 April 2009

Hey. I really liked, I love the scenery of the plot. I would never have thought about it. It`s a great poem.

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Gloria Noveron 21 April 2009

WOW..This is soooooooooo GOOD! no, the word 'good' doesn't suffice, its incredible!

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Brennah Bailey 21 April 2009

I really do love this poem. the language is simple and to the point. yes tyler the language is simple :) I wouldn't change a thing. Altogether a beautiful poem

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CoreyLeigh Mason 21 April 2009

This poem makes me feel very at ease and it gives you a sense of one of the melting clock paintings. I really do like the poem...The hands part is my favorite part. There is commented! ! ! ! ! ! !

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Alyssa Long 18 April 2009

oh my lands! TYLER! i love LoVe LOVE it! ...and you know i'm not just being nice. i'm not 'just nice' haha

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Leslie Neiwert 17 April 2009

Whoo-wee! ! ! ! ! Think it's long enough? ? ? Check out first stanza: 'repelled' that means to go away. The man came on the radio as if expecting a panamoniom to break out. Slow down, mo-jo! ! ! A lot of big words is terrible on my petite (center of invertebrate nervous system) brain. lol Big words make me think; we're SENIORS we shouldn't be made to think! ! ! ! ........................wow........................you killed him. Not a bad idea. Take the easy road out, don't have to worry about him, but now you made a mistake. The reader is now thinking about the girl. What's up with her? Did she die? Did she divorce/broke up with him? ? ? Sheesh! ! ! ! Forever is just too long of a time, make it an eternity and it's longer ^.^ lol

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