Monday, June 15, 2009

Ocean Comments

Rating: 5.0

inhaling the ocean breeze and feeling it empty my lungs makes me feel completely intact

i can taste the salt in its entirety on my tongue and i try to scrape it all off with my front teeth
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chloe young
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<font color=black>Nagourta 10 October 2009

This one was very pleasant. Well... I found it pleasant, I suppose that is a bit more accurate... Thank you so much for sharing this piece with the world, I appreciate it.: -)

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Shannon Doherty 25 July 2009

wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

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thomas carolan 14 July 2009

a lovely piece of writing chloe

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Kale Beaudry 07 July 2009

I loved this one... extremely well written, your comparison and allusion to the ocean creates a wild visual that compliments your message of becoming yourself with every taste, touch, smell, and thought. You are the ocean, Chloe, keep flowing.

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Sameer Ahmed 29 June 2009

Wonderful imagery portrayed with beautiful words. The freshness of the experience you had can be imagined with calmness over- -whelming......10/10

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 17 June 2009

Oh cHLOE, I love the imagery you had depicted.It soaked deep into my veins and will remain there for a long long time.Great writes dear!

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Betty Doyle 17 June 2009

This poem created such beautiful, vivid images Perfect

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Travis Lepine 16 June 2009

Wow... what a poem! I had such vivid images in my head as I read it and it gave me such a peaceful feelings as I read it. ...I hope that the poem is based on your home land of Ireland because I; m going to Dublin this month and I hope its as beautiful as your poem. Thanks

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Dans Only 15 June 2009

I really like this. There's room for improvement, but not much. Wonderful write. Loved the topic.

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