Oblivion Comments

Incredible from line one to last, I smiled after I read the first two lines.

hate how aloneness consumes relentless sickly sweet. It leaves me lying as motionless as putrid rotting meat........quite passionate and evocatively emotive yet ingenious,10+++, thanks for sharing

Hi Brandi, A very stirring write... with an exceptionally emotive kick, make me want to reach out and give you a big hug! The feeling of despair and helplessness is ever present throughout this piece and is saturates the sorrow within. The wording is simple but powerfully effective in delivery. Just never give up Brandi, give out but never give up... To care and be cared for is a great feeling but it must be given in equal measure! This really is a good write, I do get the impression that this has come from deep within you, with some of your engrained soul in it and it really does convey the message well. But please never forget your worth as person, no matter what has happened to you. People do love you with all their hearts, no matter how tough it may seem. Just one things... In the first line you have put For I'm A easily broken, that should read either: For I am easily broken or For I'm easily broken, the stand alone a isn't needed.