Obe Comments
half of me away
in my dream i was without
my lower half gone
just then i thought i could fly
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You're very welcome, M.J.! I'm not sure how you snuck this one by me. Maybe, it's a mixed blessing i.e. I would have missed out on the other poets' fascinating comments. Is Bri referring to an oboe? Wonderful instrument. And a brilliant insight into this excellent poem. And Soul's insight is so brilliant! M.J., once again, you've outdone yourself! Keep them coming! ! !
Wow, this is quite something. It's a good thing you awoke in one piece and not dissected like some unfortunate magician's assistant! On a serious note though, it does broaden the playing field on what's considered an out of body experience. An imaginative write! ~
Thank you, Nika. Actually, some time ago I got the idea when I remembered I always thought Lewis Carroll was some kind of magician...somehow that thought combined into an inspiration for this poem.
The old theory that our souls leave our body was not so much wrong. When we are conscious our soul and our body are together. When we are sub-conscious they are separated and the dreams at this stage we remember. The stage of unconsciousness is still a mystery. But we are broken when we sleep.
Thank you so much, Akhtar. And now your observation has me thinking....sleep is often portrayed as the instrument that repairs our 'broken' states in consciousness...You make a very thought provoking observation.
(continued) ...well, , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , not 'exactly' loved. let us just say 'it' whet/wet? my appetite for, years later, writing my 6' 3 poem. i'd 'love', also, to see a comma (not coma; i had one LAST week) and a period in the poem, but i know i can't always get my way! WAHHHHH! where is the nonsense [ a topic of the poem ] here? ? ? it all seems perfectly 'normal' thinking and writing to................ME! TO MyPoemList. bri ;)
Thanks so much, Bri. Interesting observation...yes, some people have remarked that this is not 'nonsense'....Perhaps this version isn't. The original (Lewis Carroll Said....) doesn't quite have the focus that's here. Think OBE and anything that can mean....!
(continued) ...obe/Obe/OBE, however, does not ring a bell, or cause any musical instrument i know of to sound. BUT the poem is NOT without merit. i like imagining people with missing parts. why, when, in my 20s i spent a year or so as an operating room (hospital) technician, handing saws and chisels to the surgeons, i loved seeing the end results. (to continue) ..
all the Poet's Notes aside, i THOUGHT THIS WAS TO BE A POEM ABOUT A WOODWIND INSTRUMENT, ONE OF MY FAVORITES (INSTRUMENTS, TO LISTEN TO) . (continued) ..
Actually....I am thinking about the implications of your observation here, Bri....It just can mean something to do with the instrument! ! Thanks, Bri.
Somehow your poem my dear Mj give me an imagery to my mind, a strength inside a static air....when the strength come, it be a strong wind...then to move whatever trying to stop it or to care gently to someone skin and face...like a spirit in the wind, it concentrated and disappear...same like OBE...just some similarity i guess :)
Soul, that is a remarkable insight. In so many ways- you are tight- any and every conception of the OBE carries something static about it. Yet within that frame, there is (potential) strength. Thank you so much.
The title of the poem attracts my eyes which has many meanings and hence I went through the poem.It has been beautifully captured. Thanks.
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7/29/2025 10:25:39 AM # 1.0.0
So much appreciated, Richard. I really did find your last Kerouac poem amazing. Hope it finds its way into your book. Thanks again. And I'm sure Bri is talking about the oboe.