O My Jaan Comments

cool! great effort.A nice write

Very interesting rhyming and overall sense of over passionate love, but you made it work and I envy that.Very good job.

Nicely expressed love i like it...... you have a good rhythm beautiful ideas especially the paint and brush paragraph i liked it most good luck Guess Who

That was classic. It really sounded like someone who has set out to convince his lover. The rhyme was perfect, the rhythm deliberate and the message romantic and wily. I think d first line of d 3rd stanza shd read 'with my body's injection'. Thanx for d invite.

very nice to read...a good one

Good poem but I feel like it's missing something or mybe the way I read it