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Hey, thnx for the feedback guys! I really appriciat(sp) them. Go read some of my others!

There are some lines in this poem that I really like. 'Holding by a thread to this existence we call living' and 'It all starts with each of these and thus shall end with these as well'. Run a quick spell check. This portion seems vague to me-'Failure after failure leading me back to a woeful beginning/A beginning unlike any other/ A beginning imprisoned by numbers and races' I am not sure where this goes. Failures leading you to a beginning? If you want to make that more understandable you could, however there is a good chance it means something to you, if so... Only my opinion. I really do like those lines I mentioned in the beginning, and I feel like your poem flowed. I hope this isn't how you feel everyday... if it is, hang on! Keep writing. If nothing else it will make you a stronger person and you will know how you will want your life to be different then those you observe.

I like this. I feel its a very powerful poem and it seems like you put alot of thought into it. As I said, I like it =)